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  1. Uhh I don’t think you can just include sigh in the dialogue like that because that might look like the word itself is said out loud, not as the action
    "-sigh- Yes, a ship full of losers. Every single one of us got cheated by life one way or another," Mai added. Since she obviously included herself, it wasn't meant as mean in any way.

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    Mai was rolling her eyes, but didn't tell Zuko that she wasn't some damsel who needed protection. She told herself that telling him that would destroy whatever progress he had just made. But in truth, deep inside she felt very moved that her safety meant so much to him. That in tun made her blink when feeling something else grow in herself.

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    1. The typo is corrected.

      Actually, many authors insert such things into dialogue. Some use little stars, I use the dashes for the purpose. I think authors simply rely on the intelligence of their readers to understand it's not spoken out aloud and a sound.

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